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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #60 on: April 20, 2015, 11:50:06 pm »
I'm thinking about making a Video game battle Royale collaboration thing. I have a few characters already set up. How's everyone with the idea?
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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #61 on: April 20, 2015, 11:50:57 pm »
If you could explain it a bit more I'd probably be up for it.

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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #62 on: April 20, 2015, 11:57:12 pm »
Well there's 24 dudes and dudetes and they all must die. And it's kinda like the hunger games except there's no romance bullschmeckles. And there's no workaround for having more then one player surviving. Either one survives or no one survives.
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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #63 on: April 21, 2015, 12:01:40 am »
As someone who's never been interested in the Hunger Games I still felt this adqueately(...fucking spelling) explained it. Yah I'd be up for it.

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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #64 on: April 21, 2015, 12:04:43 am »
Damn do you read... any popular book?

I'll get it posted tomorrow.
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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #65 on: April 21, 2015, 12:06:54 am »
Majority of my reading is star wars, star trek, and an assortment of whatevers at the local half price books.
Also, I had heard the premise of the Hunger Games and felt it wasn't too interesting, then they made the movies and I just kind of forgot about it...

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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #66 on: April 21, 2015, 06:20:27 pm »
Majority of my reading is star wars, star trek, and an assortment of whatevers at the local half price books.
Also, I had heard the premise of the Hunger Games and felt it wasn't too interesting, then they made the movies and I just kind of forgot about it...
Hunger Games was an OK series I read the whole series, that final bits of the last books felting really ****ing retarded though.

For example:
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Maybe I am just angry because the Katniss/Gale ship wasn't cannon... because he is working away so much? oookayyyy.

EDIT: I am sooo sorry for this rant.
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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #67 on: April 26, 2015, 11:32:18 pm »
Okay. What's everybody's opinions on mah story, Video Game Battle Royale? Rate it from "It's kay" to "MUH TRIGGAHS"
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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #68 on: April 26, 2015, 11:33:15 pm »
Okay. What's everybody's opinions on mah story, Video Game Battle Royale? Rate it from "It's kay" to "MUH TRIGGAHS"
Its Kay. Not the worse thing, not the best. Pretty good for a first story here though.
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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #69 on: April 26, 2015, 11:39:30 pm »
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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #71 on: May 05, 2015, 06:34:01 pm »
Some of you may have seen this before, but anywaysssss

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vPQXSm4egG_0O197ELiTYPCj5aw3Tf6l-I4OrwaOvUk

There are a lot of stories i donde there. Maybe you'd like to review a few? I know i got a lot of misspells, after all i am not a natve english speaker. Mostly story reviews, if you can! Or anything. To be honest putting some time into reading all those things is enough for me, hahhaa.
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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #72 on: May 05, 2015, 11:17:38 pm »
The Wait
Okay, seems interesting. An interesting writing style that leaves the reader wondering what exactly is going on, and it keeps the attention of the read(me in this case) while giving few if any real details. Overall I liked it and found it interesting enough to read entirely, and it left me to wonder what was going on. Not always a bad thing, and in my opinion it's a good thing in this case.

La'oss
Again, very good but for different reasons. With out much elaboration the reader easily understands that the people of this world are ruled by Gods who use the people to wage wars and that the world is a very dangerous place.. It sets up a grim tone and mood. Short but it does a good job of setting the mood and feeling for the world.

Expedition
Again, there isn't much detail, but that helps the mood. It leaves a lot to the imagination of the reader and allows them to imagine what exactly happened. There's a shift from one mood to another and I found the transition was quite good and actually added to the overall story.


Okay, so there's reviews for the first three stories in that document. Hope this is helpful.

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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #73 on: May 31, 2015, 02:16:57 am »
Should I do an Intermission in Fallout: Dusts of Man, or continue with the main trio's debauchery?
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Re: Critique, tips, and collaborations.
« Reply #74 on: July 18, 2015, 08:05:33 pm »
Now, none of you are wondering, but to humor myself, I've been gone for so long for a good reason.

Reason being: CREATIVE WRITING.

That and I got a job. And summer homework. Anyone from Highway: Icarus Rising remember that? That was like, last year this time! Holy fuck time flies! R.I.P everyone in that RP. R.I.P CDDA forum.

Anyways, the last time I posted something I think that approximately two people read it. (@Dusty, thanks babe.) That was like... thirty-four pages long?

Well. Guess. What.

I have sixty-four page manuscript of a story that I'm calling "PULP".

Wh aa t the fu ck is PULP?


PULP is a combination of three major stories, Amy, SLAM, and Jak. The three stories, though incredibly different, are all connected. PULP isn't just about those stories though. There are various other short stories mixed into everything. Where one story takes a break, the next one jumps in and we continue on that line. This process is repeated until the book ends, which the book has not because it's still a work in progress.

(For those of you that remember, SLAM was a short story that I decided to expand and Amy was a story I'd been working on for some time, but decided to add all these stories together in a connecting story line. It's fucking cool.)


Wh y y R u posting this?

I've been working hard on this project and so far it's my longer piece of unfinished fiction. I'm not necessarily looking for anyone to give feedback, I'm just posting it here so y'all can get a good fun read in.

There ar e a bUnch of Storeis, but GEnre?

Each story is an entirely different genre. In fact, if one story didn't appeal to you, you could skip it entirely and the story still functions. Meaning if you loved SLAM, you could skip both Amy and Jak to read that. As for specific genres: SLAM - Science Fiction/Cyber Punk/Neon Pink Bubble Gum Pop  Amy - Surreal Horror  Jak - Grimdark Fantasy. The other short stories I will not reveal because who gives a shit about those???

R i P my EYES out! Where can Ir ead this?

RIGHT HERE: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YtzfFnHtfRbmIBLFTlXCDGVU7D-z1TdgMwxx3-bC7wM/edit?usp=sharing
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