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Title: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on May 11, 2015, 09:49:11 pm

(http://www.firstworldwar.com/photos/graphics/gw_brmgunsection_01.jpg)
(Members of Unified Isle of Jorgen's first division machine gun section wearing gas masks)
The Unified Isle of Jorgen had been a peaceful country that remained independent from the other countries and refused to take part in the wars of others. Never the less their military kept up with military weaponry, keeping pace with their closest competitors in that field. The Unified Isle of Jorgen military has been known to prepare soldiers for the worst of situations with equipment for any contingency they could think of.
That being said many soldiers are ill trained, since Unified Isle of Jorgen (UIJ) has not been attacked in many years. A lot of the younger soldiers do not keep up with the regimental requirements of their posts, and often do not carry all of their assigned kit. This would turn out to be a downfall in coming years.

(https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/originals/45/37/5f/45375fe75ac4f30597f4abdc45adbc1a.jpg)
(Combined Government of The Yorinthian Isles fully outfitted rifleman)
CGYI military invaded the United Isle of Jorgen (UIJ), starting the attacks with gas canisters either shot from artillery or dropped from air planes. After a short period gas mask equipped soldiers would storm forward and eliminate any UIJ soldiers that managed to get gas masks on before the gas killed them or rendered them unable to move. These tactics allowed the CGYI to quickly acquire territory and they nearly took over the entirety of the UIJ. However the retired soldiers of the UIJ retook their positions in the military and began to get the younger soldiers properly trained and ready. Over three quarters of the UIJ were taken before the defense became consolidated enough to repel further attacks.
They have been unable to reacquire their lost territory but they stopped losing territory.

(http://cs9266.vkontakte.ru/u19911665/95894745/x_d66699e1.jpg)
(Tesla Rifle without required backpack and connector)
An ally of the UIJ also managed to send them several weapons such as the Tesla Rifle. The Tesla Rifle requires a backpack that provides it with the large electrical charge required to fire at the range and arc that it does. It is not recommended that the user expose the pack to enemy fire, as when certain components are punctured it can explode violently or leak dangerous fluids onto the user.


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Okay first bit is done, and some 'splaining.

Okay, so for those who couldn't tell(what with the images and such) this universe is based off of world war 2, with some more advanced(but kinda not) technology. I'm going to develop this more and then release the RP after I develop it to a satisfying point.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on May 12, 2015, 12:18:49 am

(http://www.ww2incolor.com/d/700295-2/1+_1_)
(United Isles of The Kingdom soldiers on a final training mission before deploymeny)
The UIK would have aided the UIJ but they were fighting their own war with the CGYI and were unable to send aid. Fortunately the UIK were more prepared, having maintained military discipline among their soldiers and providing the neccessary kit for what they thought was an eventual attack from the expansionist CGYI. The UIK fighters were prepared for the gas and were not phased by the onrushing enemy soldiers, and easily dispatched the fool hardy and victory hungry enemies.
the CGYI soldiers had to switch to attrition tactics, bringing mortar stations and tanks to aid in the combat. However by the time they had moved these forces into position the UIK soldiers had already moved countermeasures into place and eliminated the first rushing wave of tanks and responded with accurate and deadly mortar fire.

Spoiler:  okay, big image (hover to show)

(http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/5/5e/AK-soldiers_Parasol_Regiment_Warsaw_Uprising_1944.jpg)

(United Isle of Jorgen resistance fighters in occupied territory)
The UIJ resistance formed quickly, as many of the civilians had formerly been soldiers of some kind and had the training neccessary. Their weapons were primarily civilian, though they used captured weapons and explosives as well. These boys carried out operations both in the day light and under the cover of night with little fear. They fight for their freedom and they know the risks.
The UIJ resistance has been quite successful but have hit roadblocks, with their lack of any real anti tank capabilities.


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So two parts out, might get this done faster then  I thought. Anyway, I might go back and put all the pics in spoilers since they might be a bit big, but they help get across information. I'm trying to keep them primarily black and white as that fits better with what I'm trying to do in my opinion.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on May 12, 2015, 11:55:46 am

(http://3219a2.medialib.glogster.com/media/e6/e602257ebc280a6b236f13d77b1874b9ccb2fb444b54138d7d33f3b5607c29ac/flamethrower-m2a1-7.jpg)
(CGYI flamethrower at display in one of the military training compounds)
The Resistance Fighters however faced an enemy that would show no mercy if they found them. The CGYI burned down entire towns if they discovered a resistance cell. The demolitions squads charged with this duty would sweep the towns with flame throwers and burn any structure they saw, and anyone out of their uniform was shot on sight.
These demolitions squads would have eight members, two equipped with flamethrowers, six equipped with automatic weapons. Demolitions squads deployed for this task were known to wear skull shaped helmets with integrated gas masks.
(http://static.planetminecraft.com/files/resource_media/screenshot/1246/A-Tiger-of-101-SS-sPzAbt-advances-across-open-country-France-Spring-1944-small_4147177.jpg)
(A Combined Government of the Yorinthian Isles tank rolling towards the front lines against the United Isles of the Kingdom)
Tank Crews of CGYI were heavily trained and coordinated. Each individual could fulfill all roles required to operate the tank so that if one of the crewmen is eliminated another can take his place. however this only works if the tank is still in one piece, so a shell to the ammo box would still render the vehicle inoperable.
(http://www.seabee.info/images/hangar-11-320R.gif)
(A United Isles of the Kingdom helicopter used to transport small squads of soldiers)
the United Isles had for years developed fast transport vehicles to aid in what they saw as an inevitable conflict. They knew they would need a way to swiftly move troops from one position to another. These fast helicopters were one of the first fast transit vehicles that they developed, and it has been used for years. It can carry at most a squad of six soldiers in light gear.
(http://www.surplusandadventure.com/images/page/infantry_1918.jpg)
(A piece of metal infantry armor designed to aid in the protection of a soldier in the field. Variations of this are used by all sides)
Soldiers more often then not only wore their uniform and whatever assigned kit they had. Few were given this kind of metal armor, and it was generally high priority targets like machine gunners. The effectiveness of this armor varies. There are several variations of this armor, and the different sides are developing various kinds of armor, with the UIK attempting to integrate the hydraulics of other devices into a suit of armor that might allow soldiers to use heavier weapons that they would otherwise need to have on a bi-pod.

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Okay, so got more done here then I thought I would. Anyway, if you couldn't tell this is not strictly bound to WW2 technology but the universe itself is based in that time period, the majority of weapons are from WW2 and 1, though you'll see some scifi weapons as well(tesla rifle). Hopefully I'll get enough put up here where I think  I can start the RP I have planned.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: Six on May 12, 2015, 12:01:15 pm

Uh if this is open to comments at the moment (if it's not then let me know so I can take it down so I'm not interrupting your posts, or report it to a moderator, I don't think Dusty will mind quietly deleting this) then this is good work Vulnus, well done. I'm enjoying the setting, I always love alternate history WW settings.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on May 12, 2015, 12:15:30 pm

Yeah this is open to comments, and glad you like it. A lot of inspiration came from an older RP of mine, but I decided to go with a more grounded and plausible premise(the RP took place on mars in the 1950s or so). I've actually really enjoyed writing this, and having these images actually really helps with that. There's some stuff I'd already have written up but I can't find a good image to represent things like the hydraulic armor.
I'm fairly certain it's clear both with the images and names, but the UIK takes inspiration from Britain, and the CGYI are German inspired. Not sure what the NI would be, American maybe? I don't know honestly, though the image I had to use for that machine gun crew was evidently British.
I will say that while this is essentially WW2, it's alternate history and geography, the latter so I don't have to go very carefully look up maps and such, since I'd probably end up with a situation of someone going 'hold up this battlefield wasn't like that'. The former of those two so I can have stuff like the Tesla Rifle and hydraulic armor.
To end this somewhat rambling post, pretty much anything I write is open to comments, and in fact I really appreciate them. It gives me feedback on what I'm doing right and what I need to change. If there is something I don't want comments on I'll make sure to put something in the original post to make that clear.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on May 12, 2015, 03:05:04 pm

(http://www.thecheapplace.com/image/cache/data1/data/Product-images/goodsports/a/PPA6547-Green-Gas-Mask-Skull-Patch-650x410.jpg)
(The insignia of the Death Bringer assault company of the CGYI)
The Assault companies were the best trained and equipped of the CGYI's military. They were also very secluded, and new members were few. These men tended to be considered mentally unstable, and a few members have disappeared from their assigned positions for a number of days, only to return and suggest an advance. After these suggestions the military forces that pushed forward would find enemy positions highly damaged or completely destroyed. They would find dead enemy soldiers neatly laid out in several lines, with dog tags placed on their chests and their weapons lying at their feet. Buildings were either burned out with flamethrowers or blown up with grenades and rockets, either way after sweeping the buildings the soldiers remarked that the building should be demolished, stating that they would not re enter the buildings even if threatened with death from a superior. Upon inspection by officers evidence of scenes of extraordinary violence were found, along with makeshift torture rooms.
When questioned the assault company members neither affirmed or denied their part in these events. The officers in charge of them had no evidence either way, stating simply that the men left their post for a number of day before returning and suggesting a quick advance.

(https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/236x/d5/a2/0c/d5a20c959e92b4c1572ac91c28d0f90d.jpg)
(A prototype of the hydraulic armor the UIK has developed. more advanced versions have already begun production and providing them to their soldiers)
The UIK soldiers outfitted with this armor were able to be mobile while operating weapons previously restricted to vehicle use. Heavy Machine Gunners outfitted with this armor are capable of remaining mobile while still remaining accurate and providing devastating fire power against the enemy. The heavier variant of the rocket launchers used by the UIK are also now viable for infantry to use. Where these rocket launchers would previously have removed a man's arm from the recoil, they can now be used safely and accurately in this armor.
The armor also provides a large increase in strength to the wearer, as well as protection.

(http://thumbs3.ebaystatic.com/d/l225/pict/201217818550_1.jpg)
(The Emblem of one of the larger cells of UIJ resistance)
The UIJ resistance was not discouraged by the destruction of a few of their cells and they carried on with their guerrilla tactics. They would continue to bomb key positions and railways, and otherwise hinder the CGYI military's assault. One of the largest cells actually managed to take control of an arms train and steal a cache of weapons that would help to fuel the reistance.

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Okay, I think I'm almost ready to start the RP. And for those pointing out what looks like an MP5 and M60 in the first image, I chose that one because it was the only one I found that really fit what I was going for, so I had to disregard the discrepancies in weapon tech.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on May 12, 2015, 09:24:00 pm

(http://www.deactivated-guns.co.uk/images/bigpics/thompson_m1a1/thompson_m1a1IMG_1792.jpg)
(A UIK Sub machine gun set atop a soldiers ruck sack during a break in their march)
This weapon was commonly used by UIK shock troopers and airborne units. The shock troopers, usually adorned with a lighter version of the metal chest plates and gas masks, would wait for near dark and then perform precision attacks on the enemy lines.
The Airborne units preferred the weapon because it was light, easy to handle, and capable of close to mid range combat, which was usually the combat parameters they operated in. The Airborne were commonly dropped into cities or other urban environments and given a set of objectives to achieve, after which they would be extracted. Airborne were also equipped with various explosives and useful tools for their job.
(http://lh3.ggpht.com/_RU8vXW4WLqU/S99SG9BsY5I/AAAAAAAASF8/UJKIJn-058g/R3_incendiary_grenade.jpg)
(A Tesla Grenade designed to aid in eliminating opposing soldiers in close quarters)
A weapon similar to the Tesla rifle. It unleashes a burst of electricity that will eliminate anyone living within a radius, but unlike other grenades it generally leaves the surrounding environment relatively intact. The weapon is a one time use before needing to be recharged.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: Six on May 13, 2015, 01:42:48 am

Since this is Alternate history it's pointless to mention, but I will anyway. The Thompson was an American SMG, it was also stupidly heavy, but anyways, does this mean the UIK is slightly American influenced?

The NI might be a little uhhh... Politically difficult with a few Brits, NI stands for Northern Ireland to us and there were a few Troubles (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Troubles) with Ireland not so long ago, there's still a few occasionally to this day. So militarising anything with the name NI might end up being accidentally political, especially if they end up with any Irish influences or being essentially a resistance cell, which is what the IRA (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Provisional_Irish_Republican_Army) saw themselves as and we still have a vehement hatred for them.
And just to point out, as a Brit, that's more or less how they feel, extremely Irish, extremely similar to the IRA.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on May 13, 2015, 08:36:27 am

I knew that meant something....
But nah, the UIK is still primarily British inspired, I just need an SMG image for an excuse to talk about those two troops.
Also, I'll get to changing NI around to something different, as I was unaware at the time of what the name might entail. I just came up with the first name I could think of and rolled with it, so I'll change as soon as I think of something.
Also, before anyone decides to be an arse. I was aware there was tension between Ireland and Britain, my brain just did not put two and two together when I made a British inspired nation and one initialed NI. Please forgive that lack of foresight.

The NI(okay let's just change that now). The Unified Isle of Jorgen (yes I'm stealing Jorgen get over it) UIJ. The UIJ aren't really inspired by anything at this point, their just kinda similar to the other gas mask wearing gun toting WW2 nations. Country wise I was more thinking them a mix of the French, Polish, and bit of American.
from my limited understanding, the French are a passionate people about....wine. and other things I'm sure, but that's just one of the many stereotypes you hear in America, and the running joke that the French don't win wars they just surrender(to which I'd like to reply 'what about Napoleon.). The whole resistance idea came from some stories I read about French and Belgian resistance fighters.
So I apologize for the mistake on my part, I just did not have the fore sight to see that being a problem and I'll change it. The point of this is not to be political, it's just to have fun.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: Six on May 13, 2015, 08:44:26 am

Yeah it's fine, I was just pointing it out just in case someone took offence to it, since some people are still a little heated over it even these days. The tension between Britain and Ireland isn't something often talked about these days though, and some people refuse to believe it exists, so it's expected for you to not automatically think about it.

A lot of the French sterotypes, from my experience, are actually fairly accurate, at least the less offensive ones are, a lot of French people have a passion for food in general, partly due to their culture. On the topic of the French Resistance during WW II, they were little more than farmers with crappy weapons the Brits gave to them, that didn't even always work and the Germans were still worried about them.

Edit: On that point, the Liberator would be a good thing to include, it was awful but it definitely worked for the French Resistance. From what I remember about it, it was made as cheaply as possible and airdropped en masse across France. The weapon had only a single shot and was more or less used by firing it into the back of the skull or neck at point blank range, so that the soldiers weapon could then be stolen.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on May 13, 2015, 08:51:54 am

Still, it's something I should have done a bit more research on. I knew it existed, I just failed to realize how what I was writing was connected to the real world. That's something I do more then I'd like to admit in my writing.

But anyway, yeah the French were not idiots from what I read. They were competent and capable, they just weren't prepared for the forces that attacked them.
I'll probably get another part or two up later today.

EDIT: Oh yeah, I think I changed everything over ot using UIJ, if I missed anything let me know.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on May 13, 2015, 06:27:31 pm

(http://i0.wp.com/listverse.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/05/images-8-2.jpg?resize=550%2C240)
(A UIJ machine gun commonly used on the front lines)
In it's current state the UIJ military was split into three divisions. The Infantry are the largest of the three divisions. That is followed by the Armor, and then the Air divisions.
Despite this split the three divisions work with great coordination and expertise.
(http://www.militaryfactory.com/smallarms/imgs/mp40.jpg)
(A CGYI sub machine gun commonly used in their infantry)
The CGYI had a special division of their infantry known as 'Kill Squads'. These men were sent on what was generally considered suicide missions against enemy positions and depots. These soldiers know the risks of the job better then most, as they are always given all the details of the assignment upfront. This is one of the few divisions of the CGYI military that is only staffed by volunteers, men willing to die to aid their country.
(http://www.aresgames.eu/wp/wp-content/uploads/2012/11/610x250_SopwithCamel.jpg)
(A UIK plane just before being sent on a mission)
The UIK had planes as well as copters, and they conducted bombing runs against the enemy. Part of why they were not so easily overrun is that their air force was set up to rapidly respond to any attack from their aggressive neighbor. One of the most renowned squadrons was the Sun Raiders.

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there, got a part up and I'm pretty well ready to start the RP, which I'll probably do either today or tomorrow. not as quality as I'd like but I'll probably come back and edit this post. Just not feeling up to adding an abundance of detail to this right now.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on May 15, 2015, 12:50:22 pm

WARNING POSSIBLY DISTURBING CONTENT. SPECIFIED CONTENT WILL BE SPOILERED. YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED AND NO I DO NOT FEEL BAD FOR ALL CAPS!



Demolition squad NO. 15. Commanding Officer Hunter.
Incident #502, town sweep. Cell was discovered, elimination process under way.
Date: 04/15/1945
CO Signature: Maxwell Hunter

Command note: Large cell, additional soldiers sent to help handle the situation. Making exemption to standard procedure, if civilians co-operate do not eliminate. Houses will be searched for hidden weapons and personnel, as well as evidence of Resistance sympathizers. If any are found the weapons are to be piled outside and the house ignited. If enemy personnel are found eliminate them.
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"Round up civilians. Put them against the church in the town center. Anyone seen with a weapon will be shot on sight. Once a house is cleared our men will search it and see if there is any evidence or hidden weapons. Anyone wearing a resistance uniform or UIJ uniform will be shot on sight." Hunter said as he and his men dismounted from the truck.
Hunter grabbed his gas mask and said "Masks on, standard procedure."
His men followed his orders and they started into the town. With a motion of his hand Hunter sent two of his men to one of the houses and they banged on the door. Hunter heard a woman open the door and ask what was going on before he was out of ear shot.  Hunter, along with two of his men, walked up to the door of one of the houses and banged on the door.
An old man opened the door and saw them before going pale. Hunter said "Go with this man, we are searching your house."
The man went without protest, and Hunter attributed that to the fact the man that was escorting him had a flamethrower. Hunter walked through the door and sighed as he spotted a Resistance uniform. He continued searching the house and found a few rifles, and a grenade. He walked outside carrying the weapons and tossed them onto the street. "Hey, light that house up!" He yelled to one of the flamethrower equipped soldiers, who immediately went to work with a bit too much enthusiasm.
--a few hours later--
Nearly a hundred civilians were lined up in front of the church, into which CGYI soldiers were dragging the handful of Resistance fighters that had attacked them. Hunter walked a distance away and picked up a radio. "Hunter to command. Requesting orders concerning the handling of civilians involved in Incident #502."
"This is command, what have you found?"
"Everyone in town was responsible of at least holding weapons and uniforms for the Resistance."
"Then proceed with standard. Eliminate everyone. Command out."
Hunter put the radio down and walked back to the collection of his men. He tapped one on the shoulder and whispered "Take the children to the trucks."
The man nodded and motioned for a few of the other soldiers to help him. The parents didn't protest, they knew what was coming, and told their children to follow the men. Hunter waited until the children were out of sight and then waited a few more minutes.
After that he lifted his gun and fired, and his men took that as their cue.
--a few minutes later--
With the church in flames Hunter and his squad took charge of the trucks that the children were in, and Hunter ordered the rest to remain quiet about them. It took several hours but Hunter and his men dropped the children off at an orphanage, and Hunter handed the woman in charge an envelope. "It's all I could get, and I wasn't planning on delivering it like this, but an assignment got in the way. These children....you know my job, you know what happened. Take care of them."
The woman briefly hugged Hunter before he returned to his men. They removed their gas masks and they drove off. One of his men put a hand on Hunters shoulder. Hunter looked at the man and said "We're doing the best we can for them, I mean the best we can while still following orders. Aren't we?"
The man said "The best we can, within the restrictions imposed on us sir."
Hunter nodded and looked back ahead of them. The driver said "Get some sleep, it'll be a while before we get back to base."
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Results of Incident #502
All required targets were eliminated without issue. Burial and repair squads arrived, with the repair squad heading for the nearby rail road to repair the damage caused by a Resistance bomb. The Burial squad buried the civilians, and found the Resistance soldiers corpses burned inside the remains of the church.

Spoiler:  disturbing content (hover to show)

Results are within parameters, and several soldiers made sure we took note that it was 'not a repeat of Incident #408'. Upon inspection of specified Incident the Demolition squad eliminated everyone in town. Men, women, children. It took nearly a year for the squad to recover mentally, those that lived that long. Three of the eight members hung themselves during their mental rehabilitation. Further investigation is to be scheduled, both into said Incident and into all soldiers involved. Since Said incident it is to be noted standard procedure was changed.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on May 16, 2015, 12:59:39 am

UIK Personel Files.
Clearance Level Required: Red
Proper Clearance Provided.

Infantry Personel File Queried: Officer Hudson, Michael*
Name: Hudson, Michael (AKA:'Ricochet')
DOB: 04/08/1911 (Note: American calender system)
Squad: Second Advanced Recon Squad, First United Isles of the Kingdom Infantry Company
Status: Healthy, in the field
Squad Position: Squad Leader

*Was involved in an incident on leave, according to reports he struck a superior officer after the officer in question said 'it doesn't matter how many boys we have to throw at them, we're going to take this fight to them.' There was no actual cause for the incident upon investigation, and Hudson was punished, but got out of the incident with only minor punishment.
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Okay, so because I like what I've got so far as far as world building expect more stuff in this. Also, on my crap lap top so writing a small post since I don't want it to crap out on me and delete a bunch of stuff. I'll see about getting more up later.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on June 03, 2015, 01:06:26 pm

(http://www.panzeraufgd.co.uk/images/gasmaske/german-gasmask-30a.jpg)
(A dummy wearing a CGYI helmet and gasmask.)
The CGYI had some black book projects and dvisions. almost no one knew of them, and the soldiers that were a part of them knew these were life long assignments. Whether it was para drops deep into enemy territory or attacking the nearest enemy base under the cover of night.


UIK Field Report
Topic: The Midnight attack on base 551

Some of the attackers the men described as seeming un-human. All I could get out of the men was that the enemies just seemed wrong, and that it looked like their gasmasks were literally a part of their faces and that something in their eyes glowed. Ontop of that several men reported an enemy soldier who walked THROUGH the flames of a flamethrower and was perfectly fine excepting his uniform(Gas mask was fine) and weapon. The report proceeded to describe that the man calmly strangled the flamethrower operator.
The men are being sent home for phsycological evaluation and these claims will be investigated, but at this juncture they are believed to be false.

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Okay, going to get back to writing this because I actually like writing it. I'll probably get to actual stories instead of world building. Partially because I'm now having trouble finding decent images for things that I haven't already used.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on June 07, 2015, 10:16:17 pm

UIK War front, fourth division

We had been fighting for almost a month non stop here. Our rifles and machineguns were running low on ammo and we were rationing food and water.  On top of that the trenches had gotten muddy and some of the men were now having to wear mud covered clothes after tripping.
On top of that a number of our gas masks had never arrived, and several more had been damaged or destroyed during our time here, so that only half of the soldiers were properly equipped. Fortunately the enemy had not sent gas shells into our trenches yet.
I'm afraid we won't be able to hold the position for much longer without reinforcement or resupply.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on July 11, 2015, 01:50:28 am

Assignment 44456
William S. Masterson, Gefreiter assigned to third division clean up squad 602 (AKA: The Black Spots)
Informal Report as per request of division commander


As you may know we are called The Black Spots. We are so called because our otherwise grey helmets are adorned with black spots on the forehead resembling the black spotted flag that old naval vessels used to inform other approaching vessels that the men aboard had the black plague. This symbol has thus far caused fear in those who have run into us, and we continue to fashion our helmets in this fashion to honor our former and now dead squad leader.
As I'm sure you also aware of clean up squads such as mine consist of approximately fifteen soldiers, a minimum of two carrying flammenwerfers, seven of the remaining men carrying submachine guns, and the rest carrying rifles. This set up is to ensure the success of the objective, which is generally to subdue a town or other captured civilian district. The flammenwerfers are to intimidate and to burn down the structures of any who decide to resist or attack us.

As per usual we approached the town at approximately ten A.M. and began searching houses. On this occasion the houses were unoccupied. At first we were baffled but then we heard it. It was Samuel who first heard the church organ playing only a short distance away, in the town square. With Samuel, one of our flammenwerfer operators in the lead we walked into the church with service in full swing.
It didn't take long for them to notice us, especially since our squad leader shot several bullets into the roof. They did not react as usual, no screams, no cries of fear.
One of them approached us and said that he understood that they were under the CGYI's purview and that we were welcome to search any and all of the buildings for contraband or possible rebels. Our SL looked at the man and then looked over the collected group of civilians before asking if they knew who we were. The man nodded and confirmed that he knew of the Black Spots.
Our SL nodded, and walked out instructing us to follow. We closed the door and he ordered us to prepare fragmentation grenades to throw through the church windows and for the flammenwerfer operators to begin firing into the church's door once the grenades went off. Several of us protested but in the end we are to follow our superiors orders, irregardless of our personal thoughts on the matter at hand.
We did as were told. The civilians that lived through the grenades going off screamed. It wouldn't stop until the entire place had burned down. Samuel, for the first time in the entirety of me knowing him, removed his gas mask and tossed off his gear.
He screamed at our SL and lunged for him. He grabbed our SL by the throat and began strangling him, having knocked our SL's pistol from his hands. It was Fritz who executed him, a shot straight through the head. He told us that our place was to follow orders not mutiny, if we had a complaint tell command back at base.

And so here we are sir. He ordered us to commit things that I can only classify as crimes. That incident went against every single protocol for that kind of situation. I know that if he knew of this report he would surely eliminate me, as I know he has done to several other members of this squad. I only make this report at your personal request, and I ask that if it is used in a trial against him that I be notified in time to prepare for the proceedings, or any inevitable other outcomes.

Yours truly as both friend and comrade
William S. Masterson
To: Oberst Vincent M. Lawrence

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on July 21, 2015, 01:42:28 am

The history books would portray the nations allied against the CGYI as saints fighting monsters, but as is oft to happen in history the transgressions of the saints dissappeared.
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Sargent, and commanding officer of the advanced recon squad on this assignment, Charles T. Xsavier looked at his men and said "Let me make this clear. There are no soldiers in that town but you are going to kill everything and everyone in it. We'll show these dogs the hell they've put our fellows through."
The men looked at him with a mixture of fear and aprhension. The man who'd gotten them this assignment did it to fullfil his own vendetta.
--32 hours later--
Private Vincent Monroe of Advanced Recon Squad Fifty One
Reporting Sargent Charles T. Xsavier

He ordered us to kill everything and everyone, so we did. We follow orders despite personal feelings on them. Charles has turned into a monster. He gunned down the innocent farmers and their families.
He had us burn down their houses, destroy the crops, and then bury the bodies in mass graves. Then he threatened his squad members.
I've known him pretty much my entire military career and he was a good man, wife and kids. But something happened, a gas shell hit a place it wasn't supposed to. His entire family dead because of a mishap.
That's why tonight happened and it's why I'm afraid he is unfit for duty. He was a good comrade, but I cannot in good conscious continue to hold my tongue concerning his crimes.

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Okay since I forgot to mention all images used in this were found using google images search.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: Super Level Furaotic on July 29, 2015, 04:19:57 am

Here's a review:

Spoiler: My Review Of It So Far (hover to show)

REVIEW

Foreword: I'm not very grammatically smart, so this is more of a review and my opinion on things. So you can take it for what it's worth.


Post 1:

It's an interesting setting and I understand the conflict clearly. However, I do not like the style which it is explained. I'm not sure if this is a choice, I haven't read very far yet and I'm writing these in the moment, but I prefer to be showed and not told. So far, you're telling me of all these events, but it would be far more interesting if you could do a prelude, an example.


JULY 1938 – CAMP OF UIJ SOLDIERS

(Procede to tell a story of UIJ soldiers and then they get attacked by CGYI, perhaps all the soldiers get eliminated, but now we get a feeling for a setting and what the combat is like fighting the Tesla Guns especially if this is a first person told prelude.)


That's just me personally. Like I said, if it's a style choice I fully support you. Time will tell as I read on.



Post 2:

Warning, I know nothing about war so you won't see me commenting on that much. I'm secure in the assumption this isn't told like a normal story, but by a History Professor in a class kind of feel. I personally feel like I'm being taught what happened and I'm not experiencing, so it's not really working a whole lot for me. However this could be because I do not care much for war affairs so I don't think it's that cool. I'm still firm in my thought this would be more enjoyable if we were playing the point of view of someone.



Post 3:

I can't decide if the pictures are helpful or kind of ugly to look at in between the writing. It helps since this isn't a character narrative and it makes descriptions easier, but the different photo sizes don't work well with me.

I also can't remember what CGYI or UJI stand for. Or UJK or whatever. It would make things easier if the names created an actual acronym. Better yet, if you would restate their full names at least once again before using the shortened version. It's hard to get back into it when I have to scroll all the way back and remember what their name is.

Edit: I realize now you do restate the names often under the photos and in the story. It was a dry spell for a minute there. Perhaps fix that a little bit.

Once again, I can't really tell you if you're capturing war events really well or not because I don't study them often. So I mean, it's good so far in my opinion. I think the setting is cool.



Post 4:

I do dig the technology and the fact we're delving into some other companies within CGYI and how they weren't necessarily the best people. It does set a strong feel to how the CGYI decides to operate.


Post 5:

No comment.

Siege does a pretty good job at bringing things up to you. Probs to SiegeLion.


Post 6:

No comment, except that the plane posted does not look like it could carry a bomb. But what do I know?


Post 7:

Don't just say "Disturbing Content." Let the audience be absolutely aware of what they're going to read. Tell them specifically: Mention of Suicide, Mention of PTSD. Just saying: "Disturbing Content" could make people feel like it won't effect them because they don't know absolute for sure. A lot of things can be disturbing content. Make it absolute 100% crystal clear to any reader what the content is so they can safely avoid it.

I'm glad narration is taking a different route because it was very boring in my opinion the way it was told before. This is my kind of style.

Ooh! I just thought we were kind of reading off a paper and that's it. Kind of like a letter from one person to another, but now we're getting into some actually narrative and stuff. Here's where I thrive. Get ready.

First, I would try to cut out word repetition. For example, you use "banged" two times to describe knocking on doors relatively close together and it makes it sound odd in my opinion. I would take this and instead make a longer description. So you can use "banged" for one description and on the next say something like: "Hunter, along with two of his men, walked up to the door of one of the houses and pounded on the door with little inhibition."

You get a lengthier chunk of text that way and make it sound cooler. In my opinion. I'd also change "walked up to the door of one of the houses", because saying 'Of' so close together is awkward as well. I'd say: "Walked up to the door of the house around the bend."
 or something of that nature.

I feel like the CGYI soldiers are too nice for getting the children away and waiting for them so they didn't have to see their parents die. I also feel it's unrealistic that all the parents, none, cried or fought back. It would be more interesting if they did, because anyone who did would most likely be shot creating a more threatening atmosphere.

No crying children?

I suppose the CGYI do have hearts? I thought most of them were crazy, or at least the one group in them. The skull guys. I don't know if I really buy the safety of the children and what not. I mean, they are attackers and obviously have no problem with having crazy, mentally unstable people on their team so why would they care?

It was a nice change though. Good idea to make a dialogue from a character's point of view. There should be more of that in the beginning.


Post 8:

We're introducing some strange supernatural elements. I like that.


Post 9:

I don't know if this is a letter, someone talking a radio, or what. That needs clarification.


Post 10:

I don't have too much to say. I would've changed some adjectives and descriptions slightly, but overall it was well written. I think if you went back through and changed a few things and maybe elaborate on the psyche of William, that'd be cool.


Post 11:

I'm confused. I don't know if it's poor reading on my part, but I just can't tell who are good guys and who are bad guys. I will say that it's 2 am right now, but I'd find a way to make it clearer throughout the entire story who is bad, who is good, and who is whatever.




There you go. You don't have to take any of this advice, but this is from the point of view as an average person reading this (granted at 2 am.), so if these are problems I'm finding, I wouldn't be the only one most likely. So I'd look into a few of these things.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: ajwilli1 on July 29, 2015, 01:22:07 pm

Alright I'm almost done reading this, and I'm wondering. Could I do an RP with your approval, maybe we could bounce some ideas off each other about this.

I really like the setting, and I'd love to play in, or GM it. Also quick question: This is mostly about the Tesla Cannon. I'm assuming here that the Tesla Cannon is similar to a Demolition's Man (Read as: Bazooka or Rocket Launcher Soldier) role in the field. Given how clunky you make it sound (connectors, a charge pack). So am I reading that right?

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on July 29, 2015, 01:30:42 pm

Spoiler:  IDK why I feel I need to respond to critique but here's a response if you care to read (hover to show)

Okay to say a few things because I feel there's things you pointed out that I think I should clarify on.

First off since I'm not a soldier I'm not going to write it super realistic. So I'm going to end up writing it as either idealistic or as the stereotypical hell.

Second this started off as setting work for an RP that fell through so I just decided to have some fun with the setting and continue writing.

Third thanks for pointing out that I need to clarify what the disturbing content is rather then just 'disturbing content' so again thanks for pointing that out.

Fourth You mention not expecting the CGYI to have hearts, and I suppose I did set that up. In that post there were numerous ways that I could have made it better, but I was trying to display the more humane and mentally stable side of the Central Government of the Yorinthian Isles military. I went into the post trying to display that there were good men in the CGYI's military instead of just the monsters.

And to blaze through a few things here

It's war, so whilst there is an obvious bad guy (the aggressors) both sides are using gas, both sides are shooting or capturing enemy soldiers that surrender or retreat. So whilst there's an obvious initial bad guy both sides are going to do questionable things in the name of winning the war.

And in response to AJ
Feel free to make an RP about it if you want, after all that was the initial purpose, to set up a back drop for an RP. PM me if you've got any questions you need me to answer.
There are a couple different kind of Tesla weapons, but they could most certainly work as a bazooka, though it would just fry everything in the tank and probably set off the explosives.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: Super Level Furaotic on July 29, 2015, 02:28:50 pm

Quote from: Vulnus on July 29, 2015, 01:30:42 pm

Spoiler:  IDK why I feel I need to respond to critique but here's a response if you care to read (hover to show)

Okay to say a few things because I feel there's things you pointed out that I think I should clarify on.

First off since I'm not a soldier I'm not going to write it super realistic. So I'm going to end up writing it as either idealistic or as the stereotypical hell.

Second this started off as setting work for an RP that fell through so I just decided to have some fun with the setting and continue writing.

Third thanks for pointing out that I need to clarify what the disturbing content is rather then just 'disturbing content' so again thanks for pointing that out.

Fourth You mention not expecting the CGYI to have hearts, and I suppose I did set that up. In that post there were numerous ways that I could have made it better, but I was trying to display the more humane and mentally stable side of the Central Government of the Yorinthian Isles military. I went into the post trying to display that there were good men in the CGYI's military instead of just the monsters.

And to blaze through a few things here

It's war, so whilst there is an obvious bad guy (the aggressors) both sides are using gas, both sides are shooting or capturing enemy soldiers that surrender or retreat. So whilst there's an obvious initial bad guy both sides are going to do questionable things in the name of winning the war.

I'm glad that information proved useful to you and thank you for clarification on things. I'm moving onto your next story and I'll have another review for you.

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: ajwilli1 on July 29, 2015, 03:01:40 pm

Quote from: Vulnus on July 29, 2015, 01:30:42 pm

Spoiler:  IDK why I feel I need to respond to critique but here's a response if you care to read (hover to show)

Okay to say a few things because I feel there's things you pointed out that I think I should clarify on.

First off since I'm not a soldier I'm not going to write it super realistic. So I'm going to end up writing it as either idealistic or as the stereotypical hell.

Second this started off as setting work for an RP that fell through so I just decided to have some fun with the setting and continue writing.

Third thanks for pointing out that I need to clarify what the disturbing content is rather then just 'disturbing content' so again thanks for pointing that out.

Fourth You mention not expecting the CGYI to have hearts, and I suppose I did set that up. In that post there were numerous ways that I could have made it better, but I was trying to display the more humane and mentally stable side of the Central Government of the Yorinthian Isles military. I went into the post trying to display that there were good men in the CGYI's military instead of just the monsters.

And to blaze through a few things here

It's war, so whilst there is an obvious bad guy (the aggressors) both sides are using gas, both sides are shooting or capturing enemy soldiers that surrender or retreat. So whilst there's an obvious initial bad guy both sides are going to do questionable things in the name of winning the war.

And in response to AJ
Feel free to make an RP about it if you want, after all that was the initial purpose, to set up a back drop for an RP. PM me if you've got any questions you need me to answer.
There are a couple different kind of Tesla weapons, but they could most certainly work as a bazooka, though it would just fry everything in the tank and probably set off the explosives.

Alright I finished reading all you have written so far, really an excellent job. I can get a grasp on how desperate both sides are in the war, going so far as to commit atrocities to get the one up, along with suicidal gas rushes (if I read the blitzkrieg sounding parts right). Really excellent Vulnus.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w6RnirpFaZk&list=PL5B80F33C27AFBA46&index=5

Title: Re: The Dark Summers War
Post by: RedVulnus on August 08, 2015, 05:14:18 pm

Going to start a bit of a series in this from a soldiers perspective.
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Road to Holdenberg Square part 1: Shots Fired

We're soldiers of the United Isles of The Kingdom, ready to sacrifice our lives for the crown. But even the most hardened soldiers would have second thoughts if they had been put into our boots. We were marching for Holdenberg, or as we called it 'The Iron Fortress'. No assault, no matter how big, had taken it. And so many of us were fresh recruits straight out of boot camp.

Ryan sat in the truck, keeping himself busy inspecting his standard issue rifle. The others were doing similar, trying to keep their minds off of the upcoming battle that would most likely cut their numbers in half. But there was only so many times a man could read the same serial number before he went insane. Idly Ryan pulled out his notebook and began writing, trying to keep from the insanity that he felt so close to.
'Right out of boot camp and I got loaded into a canvas covered truck and handed my equipment. I knew that I would be sent straight into combat but I had hoped to be able to send a letter to my family before moving out.' He wrote down, then closed the book and put it back in his bag. He would have more to write later, but this bumpy road was giving him trouble writing.
Oh well, back to reading the serial number.
--6 hours later--
Ryan had just put his canteen back into his bag when he heard a deafening explosion and then felt the entire truck tip over onto it's side, tossing everyone in the back to the ground. Ryan landed on his shoulder and felt pain shoot through his arm, but he forced himself to his feet and scrambled to grab his rifle that had been flung a few feet from him.
He grabbed it as the first shots rang out and he heard one of his fellows scream  in pain. Ryan finally got hold of his weapon and turned to see a group of CGYI soldiers in their grey uniforms firing at the United Isles of the Kingdom soldiers. Ryan ran back to the truck for cover as one of the enemy started to track him. The rifle bullet tore through the air and missed Ryan as he took cover behind the toppled truck.
Ryan checked to make sure a round was chambered before leaning out of cover and lining up one of the enemy in his sights. He pulled the trigger and felt the butt of the rifle push against his shoulder as the shot screamed through the air and tore the targets head open, right between the eyes. Ryan worked the lever on his rifle and then sent another shot that tore into the stomach of a second enemy before he ducked back into cover as the enemy returned fire.
Ryan worked the lever again as he heard several of his fellow soldiers yelling and firing their weapons. Ryan leaned out of cover again and fired a shot at the enemy, watching as the wave of bullets from his allies tore into the enemy squad and left the rest of the enemy lying on the ground, dead or wounded. Ryan shouted "Okay, someone check the driver!" and then rushed towards the bodies of the enemy.
Most of them were on the ground dead but Ryan saw a few that were only wounded. The other soldiers with him looked at each other and one of them said "I don't see any wounded, how about you boys?"
Ryan looked at him and said "I do, now come on let's get these guys tied up and patched up, they could have some intel we could use."
The other soldiers nodded, what Ryan had said made sense. And since the CO was unconcious at least someone was taking the lead. They grabbed the enemy wounded and picked them up before bringing them to the medic. Ryan walked over to the two men who had pulled the driver out of the cab. "How is he?"
"Unconcious but okay other then that. CO is took a bullet to the shoulder but our medic got him patched up, he got knocked out when the truck threw him head first into the road." One of them said.
Ryan nodded absently, the adrenaline he had felt earlier wearing off. He walked over to the side of the road and puked his lunch onto the dirt. Several of the other new recruits were doing similar, having never killed a person before and having never seen that kind of blood and gore. Ryan stood up, his stomach having emptied itself of it's contents, and walked over to the medic. "You gonna be able to save these guys?"
The medic sighed "Much as I wish I wasn't obligated to try a couple of them look to be in good shape and should survive."
Ryan nodded. One hell of a first day he thought, then walked to the now waking CO.