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The Highway: Broke Caravan and The Tide
« on: June 05, 2015, 12:52:06 am »
Alright so before I get around to writing it, I've been tossing this idea around in my head for a long while. I've started to rewrite more and more of the lore and I kinda wanted to do something that could tie into the RP, but still be independent from it; so obviously that means a story that could be affected by events in the RP.

So before I get into the why's and how's I'll just tell you the premise: It follows a group of merchants that are barely scraping by on the west coast, simple set up that could lead to bigger things. Most of it will be just them dicking around, talking, and occasionally I'll have something happen because its The Highway. I have no planned out plot, I have ideas and arcs for characters, but that's about as far as it goes in terms of anything else.

Why:

-Because my lazy ass won't figure out Gamemaker or Unreal until I figure out what I really want The Highway to be, and even then it probably won't be the first game I produce... or maybe it will be I don't know. I kinda want it to be a CRPG to stick with the forum-RP roots, but I kinda want it to be a action RPG or a sandbox game akin to GTA. But all three of those would require insane amounts of skill, time, and knowledge of programming. I don't want to half-ass anything Highway related if I'm actually going to make it.

-Also I'm not really good at writing characters or dialogue, so consider this my way of trying to improve it.

How:

I will type it out on a keyboard, magic happens, and then it pops up on the thread as a forum post.


So tell me if you'd like to see this come to fruition or not. And any questions you may have.
« Last Edit: August 08, 2015, 03:40:59 am by ajwilli1 »

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I'll be watching this AJ because besides you, I'd like to think I'm the next best Highway authority.
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We really should get that writing contest going.
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Will be putting the first chapter up tonight, and I will leave this open and rename it something else. Feel free to post anything you want, anything at all, like actually using it for like critiques and shit.

Anyway, I'm going to play Hotline Miami 2 for a bit. Because I went to the mall and say that Poltergeist remake; its Godawful don't watch it, pretend it doesn't exist, for the sake of being a horror fan don't act like it exists. Also at the mall I purchased the first Mad Max and found a awesome used game store that sells NES, SNES, N64, Sega Consoles (THEY HAD A DREAMCAST FOR $40 ARE YOU KIDDING ME!?), and PS2 and Gamecube games.

So yeah, after writing the first bit I'm going to marathon Blade Runner: Directors Cut and Mad Max (I really wish we saw Fury Road instead of Poltergeist; at least Fury Road would get me more into a Highway mood... shit... I really need to update the RP, expect that too tonight, expect a road battle with bandits; I'll try to make it fun.)

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Fury road is really good.
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I've started writing up a new draft, with characters charted out, trying to figure out what I want the story to be, and some other shit like that.

Uhh... also remember that cyberpunk RP thing where it was going to take place in Hawaii, well I'm also writing a story for that as well. For some reason I really want to write a crimedrama set in a very relaxing, calm, island-like place.

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I'm into this idea.

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Alright I'm copying- er... taking inspiration from one thing that Fur did, chapter intermissions. You see there's a lot of time spent traveling in The Highway (no sh1te!), so detailing the routes, the surroundings, etc... would get really fucking boring for both the Author and The Reader. And I personally feel that jumping to a location is way too jarring of a transition. So I decided that the time spent in-between chapters, I'll have one, two, all characters thoughts detailed in a sort of a journal entry, or conversation.

It all just really depends on what I'd think would flow better, and all that jazz. So it just really depends, but traveling in-between chapters will be like a mini-chapter. Chapter, chapter, chapter... chapter chapter, chapter... chapter... Fuck now its sounds weird to say.

Anyway, I'm almost done writing the characters (along side the fuckton of lore I need to send to Symbionic Furaotic), I already had them written out before hand, but I'm making a character sheet (of which only I can see in order for the audience to not know what they act like completely). And the first chapter will be a redone, rehash of the chapter it was before I deleted the original Broke Caravan. So expect much better writing, flow, and eventually that'll come out.


So just watch this thread.

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Re: The Highway: Broke Caravan and The Tide
« Reply #13 on: August 08, 2015, 03:47:28 am »
Alright so as it turns out, I'm more in the mood to write a cyberpunk-theme'd revenge story then I am about another post nuclear wasteland.

And the first draft was going great until I reread it and thought about it. The first opening chapters honestly felt like there's a missing chapter explaining the motivations behind everything, why the characters are like what they are, and why certain names are so important in the grand scheme of things. It maybe because I didn't even have the basic plotted netted out vaguely for me to build and create off of.

I also ended up characterizing the environment more then I did the characters. Painting Detroit as a constantly dark city, drenched in both rain and neon. With dimly lit buildings, large towers that take up entire city blocks, and clubs that soak in all forms of vices. And with the descriptions I'm using in the draft, The Tide has turned out to be a pretty good pick for the name (not because its based off the RP of the same name.).

So yeah, I'm rewriting most of the beginning chapters, adding more in, subtracting some, making the motivations actually make sense (I was reading it, and it does make sense in some context, but not entirely.) But the first "act" if you could call it that, ends with a bang. And after that it goes to Hawaii.

Basically it takes the story of the RP, and does all the things I wanted to do with it. Minus the group of trenchcoated agents shooting up the place, now its [REDACTED].

 

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