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Beneath a Scorching Sun [Post Apocalyptic Story!]
« on: September 24, 2015, 12:21:16 am »
        Sand. Brown, gritty sand, as far as the eye could see. Completely unremarkable. No change whatsoever, no difference between the swirling little blots of dirt and dust and grime pirouetting about in front of my face. My head hurt. It hurt bad. It wasn't a soft pain, it wasn't a sharp, recent jab of agony. It was a dull, thudding pain, synced with my heartbeat. Every pressure-filled beat of lifeblood in my chest sent a wave of discomfort straight to my brain. I had no idea how long I had been walking, and something inside told me I was going to die.
 
        Sand. The same grain of sand blowing about in front of me, thousands of times over. Dull pain in my head. Numb everywhere else.
 
        The something inside was right. I was going to die. I rolled this thought around in my mind, before pictures clouded my vision.
 
        I remember standing in a cavernous room earlier. I remember standing tall and strong and defiant with my fists raised in a dark, foreboding dungeon of a room. Sheet metal for walls, sheet metal for the ceiling, sheet metal for the floor. Corroded and rusty and pocked full of little holes that let the barest hint of sunlight through. Big doors of the stuff hooked up to chains, wooden levers placed beside them. I couldn't remember why I was there, and I couldn't remember how I got there.
 
        I remember others in the room. Sickly. Ravenous and gaunt, crazed looks in their eyes. They were dressed in scraps of leather and burlap, with cloth wrapped about their faces and dark goggles with cracked lenses. They looked like demons. Like banshees. Apparitions from Hell. I remember standing there, in that room, my fists raised, with the same feeling that I was about to die. I couldn't remember what happened next, but since I was here, walking, dying, feeling my very being fade away, I guess I hadn't.
 
        Again came the pulsing drone of torment, and again the flashing pictures came into my mind.
 
        The first of the awful beings sprinted forward. It was lean and limber, the goggled creature mirroring my brawling stance. I remember being better than it. It pivoted of its dominant foot, came forward with its fist raised just behind its head. All the warning in the world. No surprise to his blow, no feint, just a simple attack. Simple attacks toward skilled fighters get people killed.
 
        I caught the creature's gloved fist in my hand and wrenched backward. Pulled it with me, slammed its gut into my knee. The demon doubled over, hissed, rasped. I whipped my other hand, my left, up. Smashed my elbow into the back of its head. The thing's thin cloth hood did nothing to protect it. I felt the skull cave in beneath the sharp ridge of bone in my arm. Heard the thud of a dead body hit the floor. One down, two to go.
       
        The others hesitated. Looked this way, looked that. Made eye contact with each other, and nodded. They came as a pair. One on my right, one on my left. Neither of them looked like they had any intentions of backing down, or showing restraint, so I didn't feel a pressing need to, either.
 
        They charged. Boots clanged on the sheet metal floor as two hellish figures came to end my life. I wouldn't let them. Not in a million years. The one on the right was a little faster. It brought its leg up, kicked forward hard, aiming for my midsection. Presumably, to knock me down. When a solo fighter against a pair goes down, he doesn't get back up. So I brought my hands up, hunched over, steadied myself, and caught his boot without doing anything but knocking the wind from my lungs. The thing on the left was approaching, preparing its own move, so I quickly swept my leg and caught the current one's foot from the side. Knocked it on its back with another thud, gave myself time.
 
        The third one came like the first, and I treated it in kind. Caught the fist, but I didn't wrench back. I wrenched up. Held the fingers, brought my other hand to its wrist, wrenched up, and bent the bone of that thing's wrist the way no wrist is supposed to bend. I heard another shriek, another rasping, demonic hiss, and felt the creature uselessly batting my shoulder with its other arm. I kicked its leg hard enough to knock it to the floor just as the other one tried to stand.
 
        Spun around on my left foot, bent my right knee back, and sent my boot sailing through the air. It made solid contact with the being's goggled face. I heard a lens crack, felt a cheekbone collapse, and saw the figure do a full three-sixty roll on the floor from the force of the blow. It wasn't moving.
 
        The one on the floor was rolling around with its broken wrist. Its other hand was shoved into the pocket of its jacket. I took two steps towards it, not remembering what I was gonna do. Things were slowing down, my mind was picking out bits of details from the memory. I saw the desperate look behind those goggles, the will to live, or at least the will to hurt those who opposed them. I remember tensing the muscles in my leg again, prepping myself to lift my foot and bring it down, to strike out, to stomp the life from this aggressor and send whatever it was back to wherever it came from.
 
        I remember the monster's hand coming back out from its pocket. Things were moving glacially now. Every movement was hyper detailed. My foot was three feet off the ground, moving with the force of a freight train. My cleated boot was accelerating downwards, heading straight for the creature's ribcage, ready to crunch into the fragile bone and crunch and crush and stomp and kill. The creature's hand was rising, something clutched tightly in its fingers. Something vaguely spherical-no, oval-shaped. With little ridges and grooves and a looped protrusion at the top. I couldn't stop my foot, no matter how much I wanted to. The past was the past.
 
        The gloved fingers of the apparition from hell caught in the little loop, and pulled the thing at the top of the object clean off. The little.....pin chittered and clanked on the floor, my eyes centered on it. My boot crashed into the figure's torso with a crack like no other. As expected, I felt ribs collapse inward and saw all kinds of pain on the downed thing's face. Its grip failed it, and its arm involuntarily whipped up. It hurled that little oval thing up into the air. It spun and spun and rose and rose, hitting the ceiling of the little building and leaving a dent in the top. Then, it started to fall.
 
        I remember being unable to move. Years and years of fast acting and quick thinking that kept me alive, but now, that exact moment, I couldn't move a muscle. I stood there, unable to act, to flee, my boot firmly planted on the chest of the figure on the floor, its dead comrades surrounding us. The little oval impacted the floor a foot above the fallen being's head, bounced once, bounced twice, and settled. The world was frozen. Unmoving. Waiting.
 
        Then the world was on fire. There was a flash of light brighter than imagining, a wave of concussive force followed by little stinging bits of something. I was thrown back by the sheer power. The demon below me had been blown apart. I flew back a full ten feet. The demon flew all over the room. I remember falling in slow motion. I couldn't feel any part of my body. Everything after that blast of ridiculous heat and force felt cold and slow in comparison. My back hit the wall, and my head whipped up and dented the rusty steel behind me. My broken form slid to the floor, and little drops of crimson drained from my body and onto the metal. Then, all was black.
 
        Up until now. Now, everything was brown. Brown and identical and endless and empty. My head hurt. My head hurt bad, and I didn't know anything besides what I had just seen. Not a thing. I tried to think as I walked, tried to well up memories and recall anything, but it was all for nothing. My legs kept moving, kept walking forward. I couldn't stop them, but I didn't know where they wanted to go.

        My head hurt bad. Everything was sand. And I was going to die.



Trying a little something. Kindly tell me whether or not you're interested in something like this. Pointers and tips are welcome.

Kinda based on Mad Max. Sort of. Maybe some Cata elements later. Maybe some Fallout. Maybe a whole lot of things. Not sure where I'm going with it.
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Re: Beneath a Scorching Sun [Post Apocalyptic Story!]
« Reply #1 on: October 02, 2015, 01:34:44 am »
(Gonna update this on the weekend. Been busy.)
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Re: Beneath a Scorching Sun [Post Apocalyptic Story!]
« Reply #2 on: October 02, 2015, 07:55:06 am »
Good, I like this, its pretty cool.
Thanks Peri for making me question muh sexualities once again.
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Re: Beneath a Scorching Sun [Post Apocalyptic Story!]
« Reply #3 on: October 02, 2015, 11:10:32 am »
Yeah, Its really nice.
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Re: Beneath a Scorching Sun [Post Apocalyptic Story!]
« Reply #4 on: October 04, 2015, 11:09:13 pm »
MOST OF THE SECOND PART WRITTEN. Ironing out details.
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Re: Beneath a Scorching Sun [Post Apocalyptic Story!]
« Reply #5 on: October 08, 2015, 12:00:19 am »
        I don't know how long I walked for. Time didn't feel like time in the usual sense, it felt like how much pain I was in. The longer I dragged on, the more noticeable the hole in my face became. From what I could remember, I'm a tough guy. Bits and pieces of my memory told me that I'm not exactly some pansy anyone could walk over. But this was different. This wasn't a physical thing, a person, a rival, an opponent. This pain was worse than all of that.
 
        Every heartbeat, every step, was utter agony. The booming of the blood in my head was all I could hear over the dead wind and the identical sand. I realized sometime through this hellish march that with every heartbeat, small spurts of blood were leaking from various places on my face and head. The feeling of impending doom was sealed. I was going to die.
 
        I was going to die in pain, scared, and alone, in the middle of the desert with no memory of who I was, shrapnel sticking out of my head and blood welling out of my face. After what I guessed was a day, this was the only thought I had. The sun rose, the sun fell, the sun rose, and the sun fell again. The last time the sun rose, I was pretty sure this was it. I couldn't feel my legs. I couldn't feel anything at all. Not the bits of steel in my forehead, not the holes in my face. Not the fists that killed three people earlier.
 
        But I kept walking. Slowly, stiffly, and by the end I probably looked like a corpse dragging itself from a grave. But I didn't stop. Not once. Dunno why. Just wouldn't let the desert win. Wouldn't let a dead man drag me down with his World Before bullshit tech. So I kept walking, and soon enough, I forget the feelings of impending doom.
 
        I forgot them, because I went over the top of a particularly large dune and stopped dead in my tracks. I stopped dead in my tracks, because I heard something, and I saw something. I heard someone screaming, and screaming loud, at that. Pained, in agony, suffering very badly, by the sound of it. The sound registered in my brain before I realized what I was seeing.
 
        Before me, in the little valley between two huge dunes, was a little encampment. Something in the back of my head told me I'd seen hundreds like it. It was ramshackle. Piecemeal, built from scraps. A few cars, the back of a truck, and some other bits and pieces from automobiles, planes, boats, what have you. Stacked together into walls, a little hole cut into the front end as a door. Something like a house, almost.
 
        In front of this curious little building, I saw two cars. Well, not cars in the conventional sense, my brain told me. They were barbaric vehicles. Looked like they used to be buggies, off-roading kind of things, all light, no real roof, no windows, corroded to hell and armored up in vital places. Spikes, crude, sharp, awful things, were studded all over the cars. They looked like porcupines. Like animals, not cars. Brutal little killers. They gave me a bad feeling.
 
        Their engines were running, and they were parked facing the house. Now, this told me something. My instincts, those feelings I'd been getting back there in my head, told me that this meant the owners of these cars weren't the owners of the house. They'd pulled up, fast and hard, judging by the tracks behind them, and the drivers had exited before turning the engines off. Speed was key here. Someone was raiding the house.
 
        The screaming was coming from inside the little building, and something told me it wasn't the drivers screaming. A cursory glance into my past life, and I, for some reason, doubted that I was a charitable, helpful guy. But the facts were facts, and the fact was that should these guys finish up here and get back in their cars, I was dead meat. Two sets of eyes on flat land, nowhere to hide? Not a chance. No way in hell. Only "safe" way outta this? Take them out first, or at least see what the ruckus was about.
 
        So, I walked-if you could call it walking-forward, the numbness in my extremities telling me this may not be the best idea. I passed by the war-cars, the rust and dried blood on their hulls giving me chills, their engines lightly growling, and made my way to the door. The screaming was getting louder. A man, definitely, but there were other voices. Couldn't make them out, too far. A few steps closer, and I saw the front door. It was big, sturdy. World Before steel, no doubt. Had to be an antique.
 
        It was also smashed in. Bolts and rivets littered the floor around the fallen object. One of the guys from the car was either big, or carrying something capable of that. Neither was a good sign. I steadied my breath. The screaming kept on going. Someone was being done over real bad. It had quieted down a bit since I arrived, but it didn't sound anywhere near stopping.
 
        One breath, in, out.
 
        More screaming.
 
        Another in, another out.
 
        More screaming.
 
        I did something other than stumble for the first time in days as I charged forward, my boot clanging on the door and sending me rocketing into the little building. I had my arms at my sides, hands relaxed, my feet skidding to a stop on the floor as I careened into the room. Wasn't a pretty sight waiting for me.
 
        It was a dimly lit room. Not very big, but not small either. Not much light from the sun got in through the holes here and there in the roof. Little columns of steel dotted the place, keeping the roof up. On the wall opposite the door, a few benches held what looked like tools. The whole place smelled of rust. The years-old rusty smell that gets clogged up in your nose real good.
 
        There was a man, tied to a support column in the center of the room, and there were two men standing next to him. The guy nearest to the one on the column had a knife in his hand. The other had something held behind his back. I saw the glimmer of metal. The one on the column didn't look so good. In fact, he looked like he was dying. Big slices up and down on his torso. Deep, but not too deep. Not for killing. For causing pain. His face was covered in sweat, and there was blood dripping from his mouth. He didn't even react to me entering.
 
Same couldn't be said for the other two. The one with the knife jumped back a full foot, putting him right next to his buddy. His buddy who, as it turned out, was the one who smashed the door. This fact revealed itself to me as a three-foot wrench slid from his off-hand into his right. Something told me I should've taken my chances with the cars.


Wasn't sure where I wanted things to go when I started this one, that's why it took so long.

Next one will be combat-heavy, obviously.
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Re: Beneath a Scorching Sun [Post Apocalyptic Story!]
« Reply #6 on: October 08, 2015, 12:08:52 am »
I've got high hopes for this story. Lots of ways it could go, but I do have a lot of promising ideas.
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« Reply #7 on: October 22, 2015, 09:45:06 pm »
Which I'll implement. Semi-sparsely. Throughout the year. 'Cause I'm pretty busy these days. Just so ya know, I suppose.
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« Reply #8 on: October 22, 2015, 09:49:45 pm »
Liking it man! Keep it going.
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« Reply #9 on: November 30, 2015, 02:03:39 am »
Instinctually, what I did first was size up the situation. I was big, and tough, and I knew a whole lot about hurting people, but I myself was hurting real bad at that moment. I was losing blood, exhausted, malnourished, and thirsty. Not the best condition to be scrapping in. The two men in front of me looked like animals who learned to walk and talk. They were filthy, had raggedy beards and loose teeth, and were covered head to toe in rawhide and jingling scrap. Ruthless scavengers, through and through. They didn't look well-fed, in fact, they were a bit scrawny. But they looked mean, and they looked crazy.
 
        The one with the knife looked at me, looked at the entrance, and looked at me again. His blade swished back and forth with his head. It was about four inches of rusty steel, sharpened into a point. The grip looked to be made of tape.
 
        "Wha....the hell?! Who're you, dead man!?" He piped up, a voice akin to nails on a chalkboard, worsened by borderline insanity.
 
        I struggled for words. Coughed hard, once, twice, tasted blood in my mouth.
 
        "Concerned passerby. Heard a real ruckus. You boys sound like you're havin' some fun here." It came out as a rasp. Barely a whisper. No chance of intimidation.
 
        The one with the wrench slapped the instrument on his palm. Once, twice, thrice. It sounded like someone beating a piece of meat with a rock.
 
        "The time of our lives, dead man. What's it to you?" His voice was deeper. Gravelly. Too much sand inhalation, I'd wager.
       
        "Ain't nothing to me. Your business is your business, and we can keep it that way." I retorted. The man strapped to the column's eyes had closed halfway between our conversation. His chest wasn't moving.
 
        "You interrupted us, stranger. Nobody takes kindly to bein' so rudely intruded upon." The one with the knife had a fancy vocabulary, for a raider.
 
        Now, I could see where this was going, to say the least. I'd walked right into a situation where the only answer appeared to be either dying or killing everyone else. Something told me I'd been in this kind of situation before. I saw a hungry look in the eyes of the knife-wielder, and the one with the wrench was looking to his buddy. Seemingly, for some kind of 'go ahead.' From what I could remember, I knew how to handle this situation, somewhat.
 
        You get the first hit in. Always.
 
        Despite my injuries, I charged to the side. Put the column between me and the scavengers, and ran towards the shelves. They were surprised. I could hear a gasp, and the gravelly voice of the one with the wrench screech "GET 'IM!"
 
        The tool-benches lining the wall weren't well stocked. My hand blindly reached out, scrabbling for something, anything to fight with. I glanced behind me. Knife was circling around the column. Wrench was behind him, looking over his buddy's shoulder to glare at me. My hand clasped something in its grip, and Knife charged.
 
        He charged straight into the eight-inch screwdriver I'd pulled from the small assortment of tools. He had his knife out in front of him, but my arm was much longer, and the metal implement sunk right into his gut with an awful sound. He froze. Looked down. Looked surprised, that was for sure. I didn't waste any time. Lifted my boot up as high as I could, and kicked out, hard. Caught his waist, and sent him careening away from me, blood dripping from his pierced belly. The red liquid was running down my weapon, all over my gloves.
 
        Wrench seemed just as surprised as his buddy. But he seemed tougher, too. Knife hit the ground hard, yelping and hollering and trying to stop the bleeding, while Wrench grit his teeth and made a noise like a bull and came running right at me, the big piece of metal in his hands shining in the dim light.
 
        I didn't slow down. He came at me, I came at him, he swung that wrench hard, in a swiping motion meant to catch me in the ribs, and I went low enough to duck right underneath it. It hurt like hell, having to exert myself so fast in my condition, but it paid off. I wound up right behind Wrench. He was still recovering from the swing, still gaining his footing. Big weapons like that were no good against a spry guy with a bladed implement. Too slow. The screwdriver caught him in the lower back. Right where the spine meets the waist. Sunk down to the handle, no doubt peeked through his belly at the other end.
 
        Wrench made a noise, an awful wheezing sound, but I interrupted him. I spun around on my left foot, kicked with my right, and hit the sunken handle of the screwdriver with my sole. Hard. It knocked Wrench off his feet. His jaw crashed into the toolbenches with a cracking sound, and then he fell fully and settled there.
 
        Knife was staring. Staring hard. Watching his dead friend with blank eyes. The bleeding from his gut looked bad. It was seeping through his tight-knit fingers, despite their valiant effort to stop it. He made another, different noise as I picked up Wrench's wrench. A scared one. I wasn't exactly feeling merciful. What goes around comes around.
 
        He tried crawling away, but the wrench stopped him. I heaved it over my head, then brought it straight down. Like splitting a log with an axe. It crashed right into the center of Knife's chest. I heard ribs splitting inwards, compressing on his organs with a vengeance. His face got all screwed up with pain, and he looked like he was about to start howling. That is, he would have, if the wrench hadn't landed again, a split second later, right smack in the center of that pained expression of his. Knife's face caved in, just like that. The wrench embedded itself, sent the whole thing inwards, like smashing a melon.
 
        I breathed in, breathed out. Rolled my shoulders, caught my breath. Then I turned to look at the man on the column.
 
        He wasn't breathing.
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